Someone has graciously agreed to read your work (yay!)
They will be giving you feedback and you will be spending time evaluating that and judging whether it is correct and helpful.

Give yourself a boost here and use your audience wisely. Ask one directive question.

“Is there one word that I use too often? ”

We all fall into the collecting habit. Your writing may be becoming too
“exciting” or “really” or “deeply”
all over the place.
People are bodacious pattern matchers. They really are. Even someone with no writing skill can answer this question for you and being aware of falling into the
Friendly words trap will improve your writing immensely.

Oh, and don’t forget to say thank you.